Assignment Revission

SHONAIL

Logline :

A boy that cursed by his father has to win against the other animals on race match.

Storyline :

Once upon a time there was an old poor carpenter named Ben lived with his the only son. They have lived in the middle of mountain in order for Ben to get woods easily. Ben is really poor, even he cannot fulfill eat three times a day. Because of his family condition, Ben’s son named Sho becomes a very ungrateful and faithless son. Sho never helps Ben working or even a single simple thing for help Ben.

One day, Ben is cutting the wood to make firewood for them and suddenly Ben feels not well because his weak old body. Ben is calling Sho for help because if they do not make the firewood, tonight will be a cold night for them to survive. But Sho rejects him immediately and mocks him by saying “You are very un useful parent, you even cannot make my stomach full yet you ask me to do something!”. Ben who heard that is really angry that time and curse him into a snail. However there is still a way for Sho to break the spell, he has to ask an animal in the forest to have a race with him and he must win the race before the sunset goes down in order to break the spell.

Therefore Sho goes to the forest and find whoever who wants to have a race with him as a snail. Firstly Sho is looking for a weak look like animal, so at least he got a chance to win. Then he choose ant as his opponent, but then when he ask the ant to have a race match with him, he got tricked by the ant that is helpful with each other. Every time the ant is left behind Sho, the other ant is cover up by stand by in front of Sho. At last Sho lost to the ants.

After that Sho is finding another opponent for him. Then he chose a turtle to have a race match with him, after that the turtle ask him with his irritating voice what is his benefit if he wins the match. Sho tells him he will provide the food stocks for him during the winter. But then the turtle rejects him and says he does not want that kind of thing, but he wants Sho is stay forever to become his butler. At the beginning Sho feels indecisive with the turtle offers, but he has no choice if he wants to turn back into human again.

Then the race is starting. Sho is crawling as fast as he can, as did the turtle. Unexpectedly those creatures are crawling so slowly and even we can see worm is faster than them. In the middle of the race, the turtle is toward to the lake and then he is using water lane. Turtle who is crawling in the water is faster than a snail that is crawling. The sunset is almost downs, Sho thinks he just give up and except it as the price he has to pay for being godless son. Afterwards suddenly he saw an eagle flying and he attracts the eagle by twisting his body to all direction. The eagle that is attracted is flying towards him like he wants to eat him. The turtle whose having match with him is startling by it.

Sho remembers what his father always says that when snail can go out from his shell when they wants to poo. So, Sho forces his body power to poo and make himself go out from his shell. After that Sho finally be able to go out from his shell and he thrown out from the eagle grip. Afterward Sho is falling down right in front of finish line. The turtle is startling fro the second time seeing Sho is right in front of finish line eve though the turtle is almost close to it.

At last Sho wins, and he turns back into normal. The turtle is startling again for the third time seeing Sho change into human. At the end Sho is running back into his house and apology his father for what he has done.

Synopsis :

An ungrateful son named Sho that cursed by his father named Ben, because Sho always complain about his father that never be able to give Sho decent life. Because of this reason Ben is angry and cursed Sho into a snail. However, Sho can turns back into human again if only he can wins against any kind of animal in a race match.

Story angle :

Sho is a ungrateful son and he only can complain about his life without do anything, even though his father is try as hard as he can but Sho never appreciate it. Therefore his father is cursing him into snail so that at least he can strive to turn back into normal human for his life.

3 Act Structure

ACT 1

Set up

Key Character : Sho

Motive : He needs to win the race match against any animal in the forest

Situation : his father cursed him into snail and he match win on race match against the turtle in order to break the spell

Turning point : Sho has no choice and he finds out his opponent, but he lost against the ants

ACT 2

Conflict : He found out his opponent but the turtle is smart to use water lane to become faster and then Sho is left behind.

Turning point : Sho found an idea to make use of eagle then he make himself caught by eagle then he detached himself from his shell in order to go away from the eagle.

ACT 3

Resolution : Sho is thrown away right in front of finish line and at last he can win the race the he turned back into normal human.